| Scene | Dramatic Intent |
| Have man get into a terrible car crash Character: Man is panicking, entire life flashes before his eyes While he is being transported out of the car all the way to the ambulance and hospital we see flashbacks Setting is the open road, it is raining Flashbacks are happy/sad/pivotal moments in his life, provide the backstory and relationships throughout life, quick cuts Flashback of childhood, family, and significant events in his life. Cops at the scene, people screaming and crying, blurred out police and ambulance lights in the distance sound of peoples screams Frequent cuts to medic reviving him Final Reveal: It is revealed that the man was widely abused when he was young and he was trying to kill himself by drifting into the other lane while the rest of the story shows how he got there At the end we see that the man has been telling the story of his life through this, entire story was a flashback, also provides for the backstory | Portrays a man who is dying and reveals emotional characteristics Flashbacks provide context and story of the mans life, a close perception of who he truly is Setting helps to show backstory and how he arrived at this final point also through flashbacks and shots of the car crash and rain Gloomy and depressing atmosphere with sad music, highlights mood of the story by setting the way we see the events occurring. Mood is extremely sad because the man is fatally injured and dying Help the emotional aspect of the film because it brings out the feeling in the scene to show the sad aspect of his life, and now he is dying, shows depressing moments through relationships Goal of the film is to save the man’s life is the present part of the film, while the flashbacks show his life story, Obstacle is the injury through this car crash Show the realistic aspect by going to what is really happening. Reveal obstacle and goal because there is the motif of life and death The rest of the story explains the events that led him to that point in time. This reveal of his suicide shows his phycological and emotional ideas about life and everything he has been through We realize the entire thing has been a huge conflict and that the man is telling the story of his life and how he came to this moment for the future tense to show that he is now ok and still living, shows us what happens in the end and gives us backstory |
Thursday, September 27, 2012
Plot Outline - A Man Dying
Plot Outline: A man dying
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Based on your step outline you have a quite established plot that has potential. Despite having potential this concept seems like it could be a disastrous concept. I say this because as a student you don't have access to all the props you list above such as cop cars, ambulances, and a car that you would involve in a car crash. The thing that is lacking in your step outline is the development of your misfit and or character. I highly suggest that you think in striving for a film within your limits.
ReplyDeletewow, that's deep. :D I really do like the structure of the film, flashbacks being used to retell a story but maybe a bit more character development before the events. Like for example imagine a family and a daughter asking him if they were going to be together forever. Flash forward to him getting in a horrible car crash and rethinking of a story of his daughter and how strong their relationship is. Because your story so far only seems like a powerful scene in a great movie. I like your concept but the scenes seem a little bit challenging to reproduce without looking like an amateur, because I know you're striving for an emotionally driven story.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good, emotional storyline, but I feel this would be really hard to execute with the resources and budget of a high school student. LIke Kim and Arafat said above, more character development and backstory would help the audience connect more with the main character. I just am thinking how you would incorporate the flashbacks to really give the character a life. Besides the main character getting in a car crash, what would make the audience feel more mournful or sorrow for him? Does he have a family? Was he on the way somewhere important? Was he an important person? Otherwise, this has potential to be a really good and emotional storyline.
ReplyDeleteThis has the potential to being a very emotional piece. Also, as Dom pointed out, it would be hard to pull something like this off with almost no budget, especially the car crash scene. But, there are always some cheaper alternatives. Anyways, I think your story could benefit if all the flashbacks are related to the crash. It would be rally cool to see how all the things in his life has led him to be on his deathbed. This way, the character can be developed more rather than simply being a dude in a car crash thinking about stuff. I think if you incorporate the flashbacks and flash-forwards in a creative way, this short could become great.
ReplyDeleteThis story sounds poignant just listening to it. Maybe you can relate everyone's fear of death. If you simply have death, it must have a relatable concept or else it will seem insincere. You will need a character build up for us to feel for him. This sounds like a potentially great movie that will share an emotional lesson.
ReplyDeleteI think you need to develop your flashback scene a bit more, since its the meat of your project. Defiantly reference what KIM said and maybe more developmental plotline of this protagonist in said flashbacks and relationships. Maybe even throw a hint of suicide or regret in there! Create some more fleshed out interesting relationships and such. Thats my 2 cents. However, i disagree with everyone who has commented here, DO THE CAR CRASH! I can help you. We can use the magic of cinema, that is, editing tricks, lighting and other easy trickery. No hardcore fx. That way we can keep realism and make it easy. TALK TO ME ABOUT IT!
ReplyDeleteI love you Conner. Thanks for the feedback guys, and I totally agree and trust me, this was just a basic step outline that was to serve only to influence my final piece and not have all of the parts that I included. Thanks Conner, we can discuss later hahah.
ReplyDeleteI believe this has some very important details for a great dramatic film and has a very good structure to it. We might need to develop the actual problem a bit more and possibly focus the flashbacks on certain parts of his life that would better portray his misfit status in society. It sounds very good though and like Conner said dont shorten your film or its intentions just because of your limitations, because anything is possible with a little cinema magic.
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